Wednesday, April 28, 2010

X-ing Off Names

The following is a work of fiction.

X-ing Off Names

I hid in the parking garage behind a car. Waiting. I had to make sure the job was done before I moved on to the next.

A guy's gotta eat... and have a nice car... and a nice house filled with nice things. Let's not forget the hot girlfriends. Can't ask for much more in life. Except that I get the job done. I always get the job done.

I heard footsteps echoing through the garage, keys jingling. A tall curvaceous woman with a tight suit unlocked her car. False alarm. I was disappointed. I was ready to be done with this. I watched the woman pull her car out of the garage.

Not a second too soon I saw my mark. She was certainly a knock out. I'd seen her before, but I rarely looked closely at any hit. She was the kind of woman that I liked to keep at my house. Too bad. I smiled to myself.

I made my way into the open. I approached her. She looked curious and even a little scared. I liked it when they looked scared. "Mrs. Murphy?"

"For the moment. Who are you?"

"Let me show you." I smiled wide knowing the fear that was about to overtake her. I pulled out my gun, and pointed it at her face. She sneered at me. Wait, What?

"Go ahead then." She smiled at me, and I wondered where the flicker of fear had gone when I first approached her. I had to ask.

"Why aren't you afraid?"

"Being afraid makes no difference. Besides it's you who should fear me."

I grinned wide, showing my teeth.

"Tell you what," she continued. "Let me go and this won't be your last hit. Kill me and lose everything. I know who you are. I know who you work for, and I have provisions in place that will ensure that if I don't show up for my appointments tomorrow you will be turned in to the police."

I had had enough. This game was boring me , and I didn't appreciate being threatened. I pulled the trigger and shot her in the head. She crumpled on the ground. I gave her a kick before I slipped quickly and quietly out of the garage.

She'd known what she was doing. She planted a seed of fear into me. She deprived me of the pleasure of X-ing off names. For next few weeks at least.

The End


arlee bird said...

Cold blooded. That's a good story that makes us want more. She must have been bluffing and he called it.

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Lisa said...

Well that was unexpected! I agree with Arlee - cold blooded! :)


A good story, I enjoyed reading, it's sirprising what one can write in such a small space.

Have a good day.

The Alliterative Allomorph said...

That made me laugh! LOL I have no idea why. Is it wrong to laugh at someone being murdered??? ;-/

R. M. Iyer said...

Brilliant, Marjorie.
Perhaps your best yet, and many of them have been really great.

~ Rayna

Nf1andprek-whisper said...

I like this one alot, you are a great writer. I think you are very good at what you do.

Raquel Byrnes said...

Love flash fiction. Great character and 'mark'...I wonder now if what she said was true, or just a last ditch effort...will there be more?

Grammy said...

Great story, and I really liked the ending. I say she was just bluffing. I think she could have been maybe sick with cancer or something, and that was a quick way of ending it all.

Marjorie said...

@ Lee- I thought I would be a little darker.

@ Lisa- I'm glad you didn't expect her to get killed. I was stretching my ability to kill of a character.

@ Yvonne- I sort of wanted it to feel like it all happened very fast. Sort of like a prolonged moment in time. I hope I got that across.

@ Alliterative- My husband had the very same reaction. It's not like my main character didn't enjoy it at any rate. He probably felt like laughing.

@ Natasha- Wow, thanks! That means a lot coming from you.

@ Whisper- Thanks for reading.

@ Raquel- I don't know if there will be more. It was just sort of stretching my wings a bit.

@ Grammy- I gather you are not one of those writers that would like killing off a character at all. I found myself actually enjoying writing this piece however sick and twisted that might make me. Haha!