Saturday, April 2, 2011

Broken


The following is a work of fiction.

Broken

Tick, tick , tick, tick. The clock on the wall beat in time with the twitches of the sleeping figure. The room was bare but for small, metal framed bed. The floor tiles were dingy and there was small barred window that sat high on the wall.

The eyelids of the sleeper moved rapidly. Behind the lids in the sleeper's brain an endless struggle raged. Is it real or isn't it? Am I or am I not?

The employees of the institution in which he now slept remembered the day he walked in and asked to be admitted. He seemed sane, but as time went on it was clear he was quite disturbed. Doctors speculated that a traumatic event had cause him to break and that he only had enough presence of mind to realize he needed help before he completely cracked up.

The truth was they had to keep him constantly sedated. A week after he checked himself into treatment he began to whimper and then to whine until blood curdling screams were tearing through the institution.

Was he insane? The doctors and nurses would have said that it was certain. OR somewhere was there a man in a suit holding down a red button. Was our sleeper being called to a place he didn't want to go to do things he didn't want to do. Was he broken? Or were these more delusions? You decide.




Image courtesy of google images

23 comments:

Dawn M. Hamsher said...

Will we get to hear more of the story? I'm ready!

RosieC said...

I'm with Dawn on this one. I would love to see this fleshed out into something with more details. It's like a teaser taster, and I want to buy the entree.

Rosie
East for Green Eyes

baygirl32 said...

I can't stop looking at the broken mirrorm what a great picture

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Missy said...

I want to know what happens next!

Margaret Hall said...

Applause, Marjorie~!! Your write has tempted us all to return to read of his plight or escape...Love the added pic of the mirror...Thanks for bringing us a great "B"...
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Nf1andprek-whisper said...

fun..start.. hope another letter has some more of it.

Wanda said...

Great image and the story has me intrigued to hear more.

Giggle, Laugh, Cry said...

Just stopped by from the A-Z Challenge!!
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Leovi said...

I loved that picture of broken glass and your words very interesting.

Nicole/MadlabPost said...

They were delusions, maybe. Just a guess. Your post has me wanting to play Broken by Seether and Amy Lee, even though the subject matter of their song is pretty unrelated to the subject matter of your post.

Still, it's moving nonetheless!

The Words Crafter said...

Wow! That's awesome. I agree, it should be fleshed out and turned into a novel. I'd buy it, seriously!

ali said...

It's the Twilight zone! And I love twisty tales like that!

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Lovely to hear from you again, I loved this and look forward to reading more during the month.

Thanks for the comments. much appreciated.
Yvonne.

Tracy Jo said...

I love the picture of the glass! And...want to hear more.... :-)

Tracy
www.evolvingsoul11.com

Manzanita said...

ooohh, Broken glass and broken man spells danger. And a cliff hanging ending. Great post.
Manzanita
Wanna buy a duck

gemsandrhinestones said...

The image is very powerful. The story needs to be continued...I want to know what happens.
Gems x

Talli Roland said...

Wow! A powerful piece of writing.

Sylvia Ney said...

WOW! WOW. Fellow "A to Z" participant here. I look forward to reading more from you.

Marjorie said...

Thanks to all for the comments. I don't know if I will continue. This was more an exercise.

Arlee Bird said...

Maybe he was a blogger who couldn't take the A to Z Challenge any more. I've just started and I'm already tired.


Contrary to my usual practice of subscribing to comments, to save time during challenge I will not be doing so during April. If you want to respond to my comment , please email me directly from your email notification for the comment.
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Angela Felsted said...

This is wonderfully creative!

Karen Walker said...

Just lovely. So glad I found you thru the a-z challenge.
Karen

Misha said...

hmmm... interesting idea. Is there more to follow?

:-)