The following is a work of fiction.
Broken
Tick, tick , tick, tick. The clock on the wall beat in time with the twitches of the sleeping figure. The room was bare but for small, metal framed bed. The floor tiles were dingy and there was small barred window that sat high on the wall.
The eyelids of the sleeper moved rapidly. Behind the lids in the sleeper's brain an endless struggle raged. Is it real or isn't it? Am I or am I not?
The employees of the institution in which he now slept remembered the day he walked in and asked to be admitted. He seemed sane, but as time went on it was clear he was quite disturbed. Doctors speculated that a traumatic event had cause him to break and that he only had enough presence of mind to realize he needed help before he completely cracked up.
The truth was they had to keep him constantly sedated. A week after he checked himself into treatment he began to whimper and then to whine until blood curdling screams were tearing through the institution.
Was he insane? The doctors and nurses would have said that it was certain. OR somewhere was there a man in a suit holding down a red button. Was our sleeper being called to a place he didn't want to go to do things he didn't want to do. Was he broken? Or were these more delusions? You decide.
Image courtesy of google images
22 comments:
Will we get to hear more of the story? I'm ready!
I'm with Dawn on this one. I would love to see this fleshed out into something with more details. It's like a teaser taster, and I want to buy the entree.
Rosie
East for Green Eyes
I can't stop looking at the broken mirrorm what a great picture
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I want to know what happens next!
Applause, Marjorie~!! Your write has tempted us all to return to read of his plight or escape...Love the added pic of the mirror...Thanks for bringing us a great "B"...
See you soon...
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fun..start.. hope another letter has some more of it.
Great image and the story has me intrigued to hear more.
Just stopped by from the A-Z Challenge!!
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I loved that picture of broken glass and your words very interesting.
They were delusions, maybe. Just a guess. Your post has me wanting to play Broken by Seether and Amy Lee, even though the subject matter of their song is pretty unrelated to the subject matter of your post.
Still, it's moving nonetheless!
Wow! That's awesome. I agree, it should be fleshed out and turned into a novel. I'd buy it, seriously!
It's the Twilight zone! And I love twisty tales like that!
Lovely to hear from you again, I loved this and look forward to reading more during the month.
Thanks for the comments. much appreciated.
Yvonne.
I love the picture of the glass! And...want to hear more.... :-)
Tracy
www.evolvingsoul11.com
ooohh, Broken glass and broken man spells danger. And a cliff hanging ending. Great post.
Manzanita
Wanna buy a duck
The image is very powerful. The story needs to be continued...I want to know what happens.
Gems x
Wow! A powerful piece of writing.
WOW! WOW. Fellow "A to Z" participant here. I look forward to reading more from you.
Thanks to all for the comments. I don't know if I will continue. This was more an exercise.
Maybe he was a blogger who couldn't take the A to Z Challenge any more. I've just started and I'm already tired.
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Thanks.
Lee
Tossing It Out
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This is wonderfully creative!
hmmm... interesting idea. Is there more to follow?
:-)
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